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A flower's head or heart?


Is shaking of the head positive or negative?













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I’m currently writing a story and one of my characters is a butterfly. In one of the scenes, she manages to run away from a bunch of hungry lizards and hides into a flower; let’s say a Zinnia.



When describing the scene I wrote:




“……she dived into the Zinnia’s head and hastily rolled into the
pollen….”




But then, I found that the expression “flower head” means: “A dense, compact cluster of small flowers that appear to be a single flower, as of a dandelion or clover.”



Thus, I changed the word to:




“…she dived into the Zinnia’s heart and hastily rolled into the pollen….”




Would it be correct?



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    Hi, is this a children's book? If so, I suggest the tag children. It changes the focus of the answers.

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    “A dense, compact cluster of small flowers that appear to be a single flower" which is exactly what a Zinnia is, being part of the Asteraceae or Compositae family....

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  • @Cyn it's for young adults.

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    Great. I added the tag and also gave your post a light reformat.

    – Cyn
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I’m currently writing a story and one of my characters is a butterfly. In one of the scenes, she manages to run away from a bunch of hungry lizards and hides into a flower; let’s say a Zinnia.



When describing the scene I wrote:




“……she dived into the Zinnia’s head and hastily rolled into the
pollen….”




But then, I found that the expression “flower head” means: “A dense, compact cluster of small flowers that appear to be a single flower, as of a dandelion or clover.”



Thus, I changed the word to:




“…she dived into the Zinnia’s heart and hastily rolled into the pollen….”




Would it be correct?



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  • 1





    Hi, is this a children's book? If so, I suggest the tag children. It changes the focus of the answers.

    – Cyn
    7 hours ago






  • 1





    “A dense, compact cluster of small flowers that appear to be a single flower" which is exactly what a Zinnia is, being part of the Asteraceae or Compositae family....

    – Spagirl
    6 hours ago











  • @Cyn it's for young adults.

    – vanity
    6 hours ago






  • 1





    Great. I added the tag and also gave your post a light reformat.

    – Cyn
    6 hours ago













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I’m currently writing a story and one of my characters is a butterfly. In one of the scenes, she manages to run away from a bunch of hungry lizards and hides into a flower; let’s say a Zinnia.



When describing the scene I wrote:




“……she dived into the Zinnia’s head and hastily rolled into the
pollen….”




But then, I found that the expression “flower head” means: “A dense, compact cluster of small flowers that appear to be a single flower, as of a dandelion or clover.”



Thus, I changed the word to:




“…she dived into the Zinnia’s heart and hastily rolled into the pollen….”




Would it be correct?



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I’m currently writing a story and one of my characters is a butterfly. In one of the scenes, she manages to run away from a bunch of hungry lizards and hides into a flower; let’s say a Zinnia.



When describing the scene I wrote:




“……she dived into the Zinnia’s head and hastily rolled into the
pollen….”




But then, I found that the expression “flower head” means: “A dense, compact cluster of small flowers that appear to be a single flower, as of a dandelion or clover.”



Thus, I changed the word to:




“…she dived into the Zinnia’s heart and hastily rolled into the pollen….”




Would it be correct?



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    Hi, is this a children's book? If so, I suggest the tag children. It changes the focus of the answers.

    – Cyn
    7 hours ago






  • 1





    “A dense, compact cluster of small flowers that appear to be a single flower" which is exactly what a Zinnia is, being part of the Asteraceae or Compositae family....

    – Spagirl
    6 hours ago











  • @Cyn it's for young adults.

    – vanity
    6 hours ago






  • 1





    Great. I added the tag and also gave your post a light reformat.

    – Cyn
    6 hours ago












  • 1





    Hi, is this a children's book? If so, I suggest the tag children. It changes the focus of the answers.

    – Cyn
    7 hours ago






  • 1





    “A dense, compact cluster of small flowers that appear to be a single flower" which is exactly what a Zinnia is, being part of the Asteraceae or Compositae family....

    – Spagirl
    6 hours ago











  • @Cyn it's for young adults.

    – vanity
    6 hours ago






  • 1





    Great. I added the tag and also gave your post a light reformat.

    – Cyn
    6 hours ago







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1





Hi, is this a children's book? If so, I suggest the tag children. It changes the focus of the answers.

– Cyn
7 hours ago





Hi, is this a children's book? If so, I suggest the tag children. It changes the focus of the answers.

– Cyn
7 hours ago




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1





“A dense, compact cluster of small flowers that appear to be a single flower" which is exactly what a Zinnia is, being part of the Asteraceae or Compositae family....

– Spagirl
6 hours ago





“A dense, compact cluster of small flowers that appear to be a single flower" which is exactly what a Zinnia is, being part of the Asteraceae or Compositae family....

– Spagirl
6 hours ago













@Cyn it's for young adults.

– vanity
6 hours ago





@Cyn it's for young adults.

– vanity
6 hours ago




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Great. I added the tag and also gave your post a light reformat.

– Cyn
6 hours ago





Great. I added the tag and also gave your post a light reformat.

– Cyn
6 hours ago










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A few alternatives:




She dived into the flower.



She dived into the zinnia's flower.



She dived into the petals.



She dived into the zinnia's center.




Or, simply:




She dived into the pollen.




Add the rolling in pollen parts if needed.



I realize you want to differentiate between zinnia the plant and the actual flower. You don't want your readers thinking she's going to be hiding under the leaves.



Both "head" and "heart" have other connotations; using either of those terms might pull the reader out of the story. My guess is that your story is for children (because of the butterfly character). If this is the case, then you really want your language to be clear and easy to follow. In any case, avoid terms that aren't perfectly clear.






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    "Flower head", while being scientifically incorrect, works better since it's a personification. The human reader has no trouble associating the upper part of a body with the upper part of a flower.



    On the contrary, "a flower's heart" is a little harder to imagine. Without further context, I would struggle to understand what you mean, exspecially since I'm not an expert botanist (before looking it up on google, I had no idea how a Zinnia's looked like).
    It could still work, providing more context:




    “……she dived between the Zinnia's petals, in the secluded heart that kept the pollen safe…"







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      I'm probably gonna be crucified for this given the relative lack of artsiness, but why not say 'landed amid the Zinnia's anthers and covered herself in pollen'.



      Anthers being the rods which present the pollen of a plant. Stamen also works, as that's the whole male apparatus of a plant. More here:



      https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Stamen






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      • Please don't be @Matthew Dave. This is what I initially wrote: "After a relentless hunt through dense bushes and thick foliage, her tired wings failed her at last. The poor thing fell into a Zinnias's flower head. This is when she rolled herself abruptly into the pollen."

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      A few alternatives:




      She dived into the flower.



      She dived into the zinnia's flower.



      She dived into the petals.



      She dived into the zinnia's center.




      Or, simply:




      She dived into the pollen.




      Add the rolling in pollen parts if needed.



      I realize you want to differentiate between zinnia the plant and the actual flower. You don't want your readers thinking she's going to be hiding under the leaves.



      Both "head" and "heart" have other connotations; using either of those terms might pull the reader out of the story. My guess is that your story is for children (because of the butterfly character). If this is the case, then you really want your language to be clear and easy to follow. In any case, avoid terms that aren't perfectly clear.






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        A few alternatives:




        She dived into the flower.



        She dived into the zinnia's flower.



        She dived into the petals.



        She dived into the zinnia's center.




        Or, simply:




        She dived into the pollen.




        Add the rolling in pollen parts if needed.



        I realize you want to differentiate between zinnia the plant and the actual flower. You don't want your readers thinking she's going to be hiding under the leaves.



        Both "head" and "heart" have other connotations; using either of those terms might pull the reader out of the story. My guess is that your story is for children (because of the butterfly character). If this is the case, then you really want your language to be clear and easy to follow. In any case, avoid terms that aren't perfectly clear.






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          A few alternatives:




          She dived into the flower.



          She dived into the zinnia's flower.



          She dived into the petals.



          She dived into the zinnia's center.




          Or, simply:




          She dived into the pollen.




          Add the rolling in pollen parts if needed.



          I realize you want to differentiate between zinnia the plant and the actual flower. You don't want your readers thinking she's going to be hiding under the leaves.



          Both "head" and "heart" have other connotations; using either of those terms might pull the reader out of the story. My guess is that your story is for children (because of the butterfly character). If this is the case, then you really want your language to be clear and easy to follow. In any case, avoid terms that aren't perfectly clear.






          share|improve this answer













          A few alternatives:




          She dived into the flower.



          She dived into the zinnia's flower.



          She dived into the petals.



          She dived into the zinnia's center.




          Or, simply:




          She dived into the pollen.




          Add the rolling in pollen parts if needed.



          I realize you want to differentiate between zinnia the plant and the actual flower. You don't want your readers thinking she's going to be hiding under the leaves.



          Both "head" and "heart" have other connotations; using either of those terms might pull the reader out of the story. My guess is that your story is for children (because of the butterfly character). If this is the case, then you really want your language to be clear and easy to follow. In any case, avoid terms that aren't perfectly clear.







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              "Flower head", while being scientifically incorrect, works better since it's a personification. The human reader has no trouble associating the upper part of a body with the upper part of a flower.



              On the contrary, "a flower's heart" is a little harder to imagine. Without further context, I would struggle to understand what you mean, exspecially since I'm not an expert botanist (before looking it up on google, I had no idea how a Zinnia's looked like).
              It could still work, providing more context:




              “……she dived between the Zinnia's petals, in the secluded heart that kept the pollen safe…"







              share|improve this answer





























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                "Flower head", while being scientifically incorrect, works better since it's a personification. The human reader has no trouble associating the upper part of a body with the upper part of a flower.



                On the contrary, "a flower's heart" is a little harder to imagine. Without further context, I would struggle to understand what you mean, exspecially since I'm not an expert botanist (before looking it up on google, I had no idea how a Zinnia's looked like).
                It could still work, providing more context:




                “……she dived between the Zinnia's petals, in the secluded heart that kept the pollen safe…"







                share|improve this answer



























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                  "Flower head", while being scientifically incorrect, works better since it's a personification. The human reader has no trouble associating the upper part of a body with the upper part of a flower.



                  On the contrary, "a flower's heart" is a little harder to imagine. Without further context, I would struggle to understand what you mean, exspecially since I'm not an expert botanist (before looking it up on google, I had no idea how a Zinnia's looked like).
                  It could still work, providing more context:




                  “……she dived between the Zinnia's petals, in the secluded heart that kept the pollen safe…"







                  share|improve this answer















                  "Flower head", while being scientifically incorrect, works better since it's a personification. The human reader has no trouble associating the upper part of a body with the upper part of a flower.



                  On the contrary, "a flower's heart" is a little harder to imagine. Without further context, I would struggle to understand what you mean, exspecially since I'm not an expert botanist (before looking it up on google, I had no idea how a Zinnia's looked like).
                  It could still work, providing more context:




                  “……she dived between the Zinnia's petals, in the secluded heart that kept the pollen safe…"








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                      I'm probably gonna be crucified for this given the relative lack of artsiness, but why not say 'landed amid the Zinnia's anthers and covered herself in pollen'.



                      Anthers being the rods which present the pollen of a plant. Stamen also works, as that's the whole male apparatus of a plant. More here:



                      https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Stamen






                      share|improve this answer























                      • Please don't be @Matthew Dave. This is what I initially wrote: "After a relentless hunt through dense bushes and thick foliage, her tired wings failed her at last. The poor thing fell into a Zinnias's flower head. This is when she rolled herself abruptly into the pollen."

                        – vanity
                        2 hours ago















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                      I'm probably gonna be crucified for this given the relative lack of artsiness, but why not say 'landed amid the Zinnia's anthers and covered herself in pollen'.



                      Anthers being the rods which present the pollen of a plant. Stamen also works, as that's the whole male apparatus of a plant. More here:



                      https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Stamen






                      share|improve this answer























                      • Please don't be @Matthew Dave. This is what I initially wrote: "After a relentless hunt through dense bushes and thick foliage, her tired wings failed her at last. The poor thing fell into a Zinnias's flower head. This is when she rolled herself abruptly into the pollen."

                        – vanity
                        2 hours ago













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                      I'm probably gonna be crucified for this given the relative lack of artsiness, but why not say 'landed amid the Zinnia's anthers and covered herself in pollen'.



                      Anthers being the rods which present the pollen of a plant. Stamen also works, as that's the whole male apparatus of a plant. More here:



                      https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Stamen






                      share|improve this answer













                      I'm probably gonna be crucified for this given the relative lack of artsiness, but why not say 'landed amid the Zinnia's anthers and covered herself in pollen'.



                      Anthers being the rods which present the pollen of a plant. Stamen also works, as that's the whole male apparatus of a plant. More here:



                      https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Stamen







                      share|improve this answer












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                      • Please don't be @Matthew Dave. This is what I initially wrote: "After a relentless hunt through dense bushes and thick foliage, her tired wings failed her at last. The poor thing fell into a Zinnias's flower head. This is when she rolled herself abruptly into the pollen."

                        – vanity
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                      • Please don't be @Matthew Dave. This is what I initially wrote: "After a relentless hunt through dense bushes and thick foliage, her tired wings failed her at last. The poor thing fell into a Zinnias's flower head. This is when she rolled herself abruptly into the pollen."

                        – vanity
                        2 hours ago
















                      Please don't be @Matthew Dave. This is what I initially wrote: "After a relentless hunt through dense bushes and thick foliage, her tired wings failed her at last. The poor thing fell into a Zinnias's flower head. This is when she rolled herself abruptly into the pollen."

                      – vanity
                      2 hours ago





                      Please don't be @Matthew Dave. This is what I initially wrote: "After a relentless hunt through dense bushes and thick foliage, her tired wings failed her at last. The poor thing fell into a Zinnias's flower head. This is when she rolled herself abruptly into the pollen."

                      – vanity
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