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How can I add depth to my story or how do I determine if my story already has depth?


When to start a new paragraph and when to start a new “scene”How to effectively jump from one period of time to another in a short story?Is the ambiguity in my story the salt which makes it tasty or just plain frustrating?Tracing dependencies and emergent plotholes during editsIs it bad idea to directly state the message/moral of a story?How can I keep my writing from being perceived as “too complicated”Told my plot is good but my writing style is weak. Please helpTrying to regain writing skills I lost after a writing hiatusOn copyright infringement and plagiarismShould I change my method of indicating internal monologue (parenthesis) to something more conventional?













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          Welcome.



          No, synopses are not allowed here for critique. But, the question "How do I know if my story has enough depth?" is a good one in my opinion.



          I'd say you have a few ways to assess it.



          1. Your instincts. Since you are asking, the answer might be that you need more depth.


          2. Beta readers, writing groups, and so on. If readers say they are bored, then you have not given them enough to chew on and might benefit from more depth.


          3. Craft books. It's great that you wrote a story at six. I did not. I generated my first story when I was about 30, and had kids who enjoyed Curious George, and I started making up Curious George stories with them--following the structure of every Curious George story ever written. It is amazingly easy to make up a Curious George story--because the structure is so well-defined. Similarly, craft books can break the elements of a good novel down for you--the pacing, plot points, structure, number of characters, types of characters, number of subplots, how to bring in senses, how to more fully immerse, how to tackle themes, and on and on. You can use what you like from such books and ignore the rest--Paranormal is its own thing, after all, and you have a story unique to you that you want to tell.


          4. Favorite books. Which author have you read that you would love to meet in real life? Look at their books, and break them down. How do they pace their narrative? How many plots do they weave? How much background do they provide, and how is it given? How are themes spoken to? Then compare to your own work.


          I think there's no short cut but to apply your own analytic and creative and instinctive faculties to it, and also be willing to take on other opinions on your work.






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            Just one more thing to do. I think he should also read his book after completion. I have felt that it adds depths to my poems everytime I read them after writing.

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            Thanks for this information! I appreciate your advice. 1.) My instincts tell me I need to add a subplot. There's a plot twist at the end of the novel- I'm providing subtle hints to my readers throughout about the villain (as they do not know who the villain is, yet). And I am also having my readers second-guess themselves by putting in little hints about other characters, so they are are essentially clueless - it could be any of the characters, but my readers have to use their critical thinking skills to determine who they think it is until it's revealed at the end of the novel.

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            .2.) My beta readers are on Wattpad, so far so good (I even had a lit agent read it and got good comments from her, but only in regards to the first few chapters) 3.) Yes, I love crafting stories and this is where my issue about depth comes in at...is it intriguing or suspenseful enough? Does it leave my readers wondering and wanting more?.. I think you gave me the answer to this one, and I appreciate it!

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          @MatthewDave suggests asking yourself what your story is about. I would go farther: ask yourself what is the meaning of your story, what it is you're trying to say.



          If you're saying nothing at all, then no, your story doesn't have much depth. And at this point, it's too late to change that - you'd have to start from scratch. "What you're trying to say" is the core around which you're weaving your story. It's what guides you when you need to choose whether events would go this way or that. It's not something you can add after the fact.



          If you're saying something, your story has some depth. That's a start. Exploring complex ideas, addressing their multiple facets, perhaps touching on multiple ideas, is what would give your story satisfying depth.



          As an example, Ernest Hemingway's The Sun Also Rises is, on the surface of it, about a group of friends who go to see the bullfights in Pamplona. Beneath that surface, Hemingway explores the Lost Generation and how they deal with the war trauma in the post-war years. And it is also a story about a man coming to terms with the fact that the woman he loves will never be with him. It is a story about people who might seem shallow at first, but are not; and about finding strength, day after day, to deal with life, and about so much more. All in a story so short I'm not sure if it qualifies as a novel or a novela. That is depth.






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            "Depth" is a word that could mean many things. In common among many of the ways I could apply the word "depth" to writing is a sense that there are connections within the writing that are not explicitly put forward in the sentences.



            These connections may be between the backstories of the characters, or they may be between actions in one part of a story and another, or many other possibilities. "Depth" is where paying attention to the story gives the reader information about and a better understanding of the story.



            Managing "depth" can be a difficult adjustment to get right. At one extreme you can demand perfect attention to and deep analysis of every detail for a story to make sense. At the other extreme, things just happen; every sentence stands on its own.



            All right, examples:



            John discusses having a dream with his teenage girlfriend about being attacked by a spider. Three hundred pages later, the ex-girlfriend is the CEO of a multi-planetary munitions contractor about to attack John's homeworld. John must choose the manner of defense, either accurate harpoon missiles or reliable nets. The ex outfits her fleet with 100% defense against harpoons because she knows he will avoid the nets because the icon next to the "fire nets" button looks like a web. She wins.



            Or...



            John had a girlfriend. Lots of stuff happens. Ex-girlfriend runs huge, evil company that attacks John's world. John chooses to defend with the weapon she is 100% ready to counter. Oh well.



            Ok, the example is maybe too simple. But I think you would agree that the first example has more depth.



            The real key is: How do you feel about it? If the story feels flat, add more depth. If you have to constantly check your notes to remind yourself why a character acted as they did, maybe the connections are non-intuitive, unbelievable, or excessively convoluted.



            When you think it is about right, have someone else read it, and listen carefully to the substance of their feedback.






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            A good way to ask if your work has meaning is to ask this simple question:



            What is this story about?



            With this in mind, a shallow story pops out like a sore thumb; the extent their answer can go to is 'It's about good people who are kind defeating bad people who are selfish' would be a good example. Or to use an actual example, say, Twilight:



            'It's about a wallflower girl getting romanced by a hot mormon demigod vampire'.



            This alone shows there's little going on beneath the surface. On the contrary, my most recent unpublished novel was actually overwrought, meaning it was equally bad, but unlike Twilight, also unmarketable. When asking the same of 'The Tale of Amerei Gemcutter', the answer looks something like this:



            'It's about a girl coming of age, escaping a neglectful family, learning a skill, then settling on a new family while understanding the balance between accepting her desires while doing what's right, while also having a man learning to balance reason with assertiveness, getting over his abusive family and past, and accepting his worthiness to become a parent.'



            This is way too much for one story, and the publishers were right to reject me as overly ambitious and rambling. Contrast with something like Terry Pratchett's Mort, which is:



            'It's about a teenage boy getting an insight into the nature of death, fate, and duty as he gets an apprenticeship with the embodiment of Death'



            Or perhaps my latest novel-in the works:



            'It's about a woman who was raised in a cult getting exposed to ideas beyond her paradigm, and how she matures to cope with this.'



            The answer to this simple question says a lot about the story's depth and quality.






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              @DPT The closest thing to a subtle theme Twilight has is the weird mormon vibe (a side-effect of the writer being mormon). Jacob is native american and the 'wrong' choice, representing the temptation of mixed-race pairings, while Edward is a spitting image of Joseph Smith's self-description (white and delightsome, golden-red hair, warm eyes, etc). If you read with mormon ethics in mind, Twilight comes off as a good ol' Mormon propaganda. Even extends to Bella's mannerisms (holy crow instead of actual curses, treating drinking cola as a serious vice, etc)

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              "What is this story about" can be a very deceptive question. Hemingway's The Sun Also Rises can be described as being about a bunch of friends going to see the bullfights in Pamplona. Not much depth in that description, is there? Or The Old Man and the Sea - it's about an old man trying to catch a fish. The depth in those novels is not in what else is happening - there's nothing else, per se; but in what is happening under the surface of this description. It's easy to miss if you just look at a one-sentence summary.

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            +1 Galastel; I would say one way to approach an answer to her question, "What is the meaning of your story", is to ask yourself What do my characters learn?



            Deep stories, at least by my definition, have characters learning something about the world (our real world, not their fantasy world), how it works, what is important in life, what is not that important.



            I certainly don't want to slap readers in the face with life lessons; but my characters always learn something I personally think is important about life.



            For me, the definition of "shallow" is characters that prevail but haven't changed by becoming any better. That might be a fun read, an adventure with imagination and clever plot twists, and I'm willing to have a shallow good time. But those stories are not deep. I'm not going to read them a second time. I don't fall in love with the characters, or feel like they are real people. I don't feel compelled to keep the book, it is something I'll donate to a school.






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              Welcome.



              No, synopses are not allowed here for critique. But, the question "How do I know if my story has enough depth?" is a good one in my opinion.



              I'd say you have a few ways to assess it.



              1. Your instincts. Since you are asking, the answer might be that you need more depth.


              2. Beta readers, writing groups, and so on. If readers say they are bored, then you have not given them enough to chew on and might benefit from more depth.


              3. Craft books. It's great that you wrote a story at six. I did not. I generated my first story when I was about 30, and had kids who enjoyed Curious George, and I started making up Curious George stories with them--following the structure of every Curious George story ever written. It is amazingly easy to make up a Curious George story--because the structure is so well-defined. Similarly, craft books can break the elements of a good novel down for you--the pacing, plot points, structure, number of characters, types of characters, number of subplots, how to bring in senses, how to more fully immerse, how to tackle themes, and on and on. You can use what you like from such books and ignore the rest--Paranormal is its own thing, after all, and you have a story unique to you that you want to tell.


              4. Favorite books. Which author have you read that you would love to meet in real life? Look at their books, and break them down. How do they pace their narrative? How many plots do they weave? How much background do they provide, and how is it given? How are themes spoken to? Then compare to your own work.


              I think there's no short cut but to apply your own analytic and creative and instinctive faculties to it, and also be willing to take on other opinions on your work.






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                Just one more thing to do. I think he should also read his book after completion. I have felt that it adds depths to my poems everytime I read them after writing.

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                7 hours ago






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                Thanks for this information! I appreciate your advice. 1.) My instincts tell me I need to add a subplot. There's a plot twist at the end of the novel- I'm providing subtle hints to my readers throughout about the villain (as they do not know who the villain is, yet). And I am also having my readers second-guess themselves by putting in little hints about other characters, so they are are essentially clueless - it could be any of the characters, but my readers have to use their critical thinking skills to determine who they think it is until it's revealed at the end of the novel.

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                .2.) My beta readers are on Wattpad, so far so good (I even had a lit agent read it and got good comments from her, but only in regards to the first few chapters) 3.) Yes, I love crafting stories and this is where my issue about depth comes in at...is it intriguing or suspenseful enough? Does it leave my readers wondering and wanting more?.. I think you gave me the answer to this one, and I appreciate it!

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              Welcome.



              No, synopses are not allowed here for critique. But, the question "How do I know if my story has enough depth?" is a good one in my opinion.



              I'd say you have a few ways to assess it.



              1. Your instincts. Since you are asking, the answer might be that you need more depth.


              2. Beta readers, writing groups, and so on. If readers say they are bored, then you have not given them enough to chew on and might benefit from more depth.


              3. Craft books. It's great that you wrote a story at six. I did not. I generated my first story when I was about 30, and had kids who enjoyed Curious George, and I started making up Curious George stories with them--following the structure of every Curious George story ever written. It is amazingly easy to make up a Curious George story--because the structure is so well-defined. Similarly, craft books can break the elements of a good novel down for you--the pacing, plot points, structure, number of characters, types of characters, number of subplots, how to bring in senses, how to more fully immerse, how to tackle themes, and on and on. You can use what you like from such books and ignore the rest--Paranormal is its own thing, after all, and you have a story unique to you that you want to tell.


              4. Favorite books. Which author have you read that you would love to meet in real life? Look at their books, and break them down. How do they pace their narrative? How many plots do they weave? How much background do they provide, and how is it given? How are themes spoken to? Then compare to your own work.


              I think there's no short cut but to apply your own analytic and creative and instinctive faculties to it, and also be willing to take on other opinions on your work.






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                Just one more thing to do. I think he should also read his book after completion. I have felt that it adds depths to my poems everytime I read them after writing.

                – Doctor Insult
                7 hours ago






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                Thanks for this information! I appreciate your advice. 1.) My instincts tell me I need to add a subplot. There's a plot twist at the end of the novel- I'm providing subtle hints to my readers throughout about the villain (as they do not know who the villain is, yet). And I am also having my readers second-guess themselves by putting in little hints about other characters, so they are are essentially clueless - it could be any of the characters, but my readers have to use their critical thinking skills to determine who they think it is until it's revealed at the end of the novel.

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                .2.) My beta readers are on Wattpad, so far so good (I even had a lit agent read it and got good comments from her, but only in regards to the first few chapters) 3.) Yes, I love crafting stories and this is where my issue about depth comes in at...is it intriguing or suspenseful enough? Does it leave my readers wondering and wanting more?.. I think you gave me the answer to this one, and I appreciate it!

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              Welcome.



              No, synopses are not allowed here for critique. But, the question "How do I know if my story has enough depth?" is a good one in my opinion.



              I'd say you have a few ways to assess it.



              1. Your instincts. Since you are asking, the answer might be that you need more depth.


              2. Beta readers, writing groups, and so on. If readers say they are bored, then you have not given them enough to chew on and might benefit from more depth.


              3. Craft books. It's great that you wrote a story at six. I did not. I generated my first story when I was about 30, and had kids who enjoyed Curious George, and I started making up Curious George stories with them--following the structure of every Curious George story ever written. It is amazingly easy to make up a Curious George story--because the structure is so well-defined. Similarly, craft books can break the elements of a good novel down for you--the pacing, plot points, structure, number of characters, types of characters, number of subplots, how to bring in senses, how to more fully immerse, how to tackle themes, and on and on. You can use what you like from such books and ignore the rest--Paranormal is its own thing, after all, and you have a story unique to you that you want to tell.


              4. Favorite books. Which author have you read that you would love to meet in real life? Look at their books, and break them down. How do they pace their narrative? How many plots do they weave? How much background do they provide, and how is it given? How are themes spoken to? Then compare to your own work.


              I think there's no short cut but to apply your own analytic and creative and instinctive faculties to it, and also be willing to take on other opinions on your work.






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              Welcome.



              No, synopses are not allowed here for critique. But, the question "How do I know if my story has enough depth?" is a good one in my opinion.



              I'd say you have a few ways to assess it.



              1. Your instincts. Since you are asking, the answer might be that you need more depth.


              2. Beta readers, writing groups, and so on. If readers say they are bored, then you have not given them enough to chew on and might benefit from more depth.


              3. Craft books. It's great that you wrote a story at six. I did not. I generated my first story when I was about 30, and had kids who enjoyed Curious George, and I started making up Curious George stories with them--following the structure of every Curious George story ever written. It is amazingly easy to make up a Curious George story--because the structure is so well-defined. Similarly, craft books can break the elements of a good novel down for you--the pacing, plot points, structure, number of characters, types of characters, number of subplots, how to bring in senses, how to more fully immerse, how to tackle themes, and on and on. You can use what you like from such books and ignore the rest--Paranormal is its own thing, after all, and you have a story unique to you that you want to tell.


              4. Favorite books. Which author have you read that you would love to meet in real life? Look at their books, and break them down. How do they pace their narrative? How many plots do they weave? How much background do they provide, and how is it given? How are themes spoken to? Then compare to your own work.


              I think there's no short cut but to apply your own analytic and creative and instinctive faculties to it, and also be willing to take on other opinions on your work.







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                Just one more thing to do. I think he should also read his book after completion. I have felt that it adds depths to my poems everytime I read them after writing.

                – Doctor Insult
                7 hours ago






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                Thanks for this information! I appreciate your advice. 1.) My instincts tell me I need to add a subplot. There's a plot twist at the end of the novel- I'm providing subtle hints to my readers throughout about the villain (as they do not know who the villain is, yet). And I am also having my readers second-guess themselves by putting in little hints about other characters, so they are are essentially clueless - it could be any of the characters, but my readers have to use their critical thinking skills to determine who they think it is until it's revealed at the end of the novel.

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                .2.) My beta readers are on Wattpad, so far so good (I even had a lit agent read it and got good comments from her, but only in regards to the first few chapters) 3.) Yes, I love crafting stories and this is where my issue about depth comes in at...is it intriguing or suspenseful enough? Does it leave my readers wondering and wanting more?.. I think you gave me the answer to this one, and I appreciate it!

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                Just one more thing to do. I think he should also read his book after completion. I have felt that it adds depths to my poems everytime I read them after writing.

                – Doctor Insult
                7 hours ago






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                Thanks for this information! I appreciate your advice. 1.) My instincts tell me I need to add a subplot. There's a plot twist at the end of the novel- I'm providing subtle hints to my readers throughout about the villain (as they do not know who the villain is, yet). And I am also having my readers second-guess themselves by putting in little hints about other characters, so they are are essentially clueless - it could be any of the characters, but my readers have to use their critical thinking skills to determine who they think it is until it's revealed at the end of the novel.

                – Dawn Kelli
                3 hours ago







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                .2.) My beta readers are on Wattpad, so far so good (I even had a lit agent read it and got good comments from her, but only in regards to the first few chapters) 3.) Yes, I love crafting stories and this is where my issue about depth comes in at...is it intriguing or suspenseful enough? Does it leave my readers wondering and wanting more?.. I think you gave me the answer to this one, and I appreciate it!

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              Just one more thing to do. I think he should also read his book after completion. I have felt that it adds depths to my poems everytime I read them after writing.

              – Doctor Insult
              7 hours ago





              Just one more thing to do. I think he should also read his book after completion. I have felt that it adds depths to my poems everytime I read them after writing.

              – Doctor Insult
              7 hours ago




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              Thanks for this information! I appreciate your advice. 1.) My instincts tell me I need to add a subplot. There's a plot twist at the end of the novel- I'm providing subtle hints to my readers throughout about the villain (as they do not know who the villain is, yet). And I am also having my readers second-guess themselves by putting in little hints about other characters, so they are are essentially clueless - it could be any of the characters, but my readers have to use their critical thinking skills to determine who they think it is until it's revealed at the end of the novel.

              – Dawn Kelli
              3 hours ago






              Thanks for this information! I appreciate your advice. 1.) My instincts tell me I need to add a subplot. There's a plot twist at the end of the novel- I'm providing subtle hints to my readers throughout about the villain (as they do not know who the villain is, yet). And I am also having my readers second-guess themselves by putting in little hints about other characters, so they are are essentially clueless - it could be any of the characters, but my readers have to use their critical thinking skills to determine who they think it is until it's revealed at the end of the novel.

              – Dawn Kelli
              3 hours ago





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              .2.) My beta readers are on Wattpad, so far so good (I even had a lit agent read it and got good comments from her, but only in regards to the first few chapters) 3.) Yes, I love crafting stories and this is where my issue about depth comes in at...is it intriguing or suspenseful enough? Does it leave my readers wondering and wanting more?.. I think you gave me the answer to this one, and I appreciate it!

              – Dawn Kelli
              3 hours ago






              .2.) My beta readers are on Wattpad, so far so good (I even had a lit agent read it and got good comments from her, but only in regards to the first few chapters) 3.) Yes, I love crafting stories and this is where my issue about depth comes in at...is it intriguing or suspenseful enough? Does it leave my readers wondering and wanting more?.. I think you gave me the answer to this one, and I appreciate it!

              – Dawn Kelli
              3 hours ago












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              @MatthewDave suggests asking yourself what your story is about. I would go farther: ask yourself what is the meaning of your story, what it is you're trying to say.



              If you're saying nothing at all, then no, your story doesn't have much depth. And at this point, it's too late to change that - you'd have to start from scratch. "What you're trying to say" is the core around which you're weaving your story. It's what guides you when you need to choose whether events would go this way or that. It's not something you can add after the fact.



              If you're saying something, your story has some depth. That's a start. Exploring complex ideas, addressing their multiple facets, perhaps touching on multiple ideas, is what would give your story satisfying depth.



              As an example, Ernest Hemingway's The Sun Also Rises is, on the surface of it, about a group of friends who go to see the bullfights in Pamplona. Beneath that surface, Hemingway explores the Lost Generation and how they deal with the war trauma in the post-war years. And it is also a story about a man coming to terms with the fact that the woman he loves will never be with him. It is a story about people who might seem shallow at first, but are not; and about finding strength, day after day, to deal with life, and about so much more. All in a story so short I'm not sure if it qualifies as a novel or a novela. That is depth.






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                @MatthewDave suggests asking yourself what your story is about. I would go farther: ask yourself what is the meaning of your story, what it is you're trying to say.



                If you're saying nothing at all, then no, your story doesn't have much depth. And at this point, it's too late to change that - you'd have to start from scratch. "What you're trying to say" is the core around which you're weaving your story. It's what guides you when you need to choose whether events would go this way or that. It's not something you can add after the fact.



                If you're saying something, your story has some depth. That's a start. Exploring complex ideas, addressing their multiple facets, perhaps touching on multiple ideas, is what would give your story satisfying depth.



                As an example, Ernest Hemingway's The Sun Also Rises is, on the surface of it, about a group of friends who go to see the bullfights in Pamplona. Beneath that surface, Hemingway explores the Lost Generation and how they deal with the war trauma in the post-war years. And it is also a story about a man coming to terms with the fact that the woman he loves will never be with him. It is a story about people who might seem shallow at first, but are not; and about finding strength, day after day, to deal with life, and about so much more. All in a story so short I'm not sure if it qualifies as a novel or a novela. That is depth.






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                  @MatthewDave suggests asking yourself what your story is about. I would go farther: ask yourself what is the meaning of your story, what it is you're trying to say.



                  If you're saying nothing at all, then no, your story doesn't have much depth. And at this point, it's too late to change that - you'd have to start from scratch. "What you're trying to say" is the core around which you're weaving your story. It's what guides you when you need to choose whether events would go this way or that. It's not something you can add after the fact.



                  If you're saying something, your story has some depth. That's a start. Exploring complex ideas, addressing their multiple facets, perhaps touching on multiple ideas, is what would give your story satisfying depth.



                  As an example, Ernest Hemingway's The Sun Also Rises is, on the surface of it, about a group of friends who go to see the bullfights in Pamplona. Beneath that surface, Hemingway explores the Lost Generation and how they deal with the war trauma in the post-war years. And it is also a story about a man coming to terms with the fact that the woman he loves will never be with him. It is a story about people who might seem shallow at first, but are not; and about finding strength, day after day, to deal with life, and about so much more. All in a story so short I'm not sure if it qualifies as a novel or a novela. That is depth.






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                  @MatthewDave suggests asking yourself what your story is about. I would go farther: ask yourself what is the meaning of your story, what it is you're trying to say.



                  If you're saying nothing at all, then no, your story doesn't have much depth. And at this point, it's too late to change that - you'd have to start from scratch. "What you're trying to say" is the core around which you're weaving your story. It's what guides you when you need to choose whether events would go this way or that. It's not something you can add after the fact.



                  If you're saying something, your story has some depth. That's a start. Exploring complex ideas, addressing their multiple facets, perhaps touching on multiple ideas, is what would give your story satisfying depth.



                  As an example, Ernest Hemingway's The Sun Also Rises is, on the surface of it, about a group of friends who go to see the bullfights in Pamplona. Beneath that surface, Hemingway explores the Lost Generation and how they deal with the war trauma in the post-war years. And it is also a story about a man coming to terms with the fact that the woman he loves will never be with him. It is a story about people who might seem shallow at first, but are not; and about finding strength, day after day, to deal with life, and about so much more. All in a story so short I'm not sure if it qualifies as a novel or a novela. That is depth.







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                      "Depth" is a word that could mean many things. In common among many of the ways I could apply the word "depth" to writing is a sense that there are connections within the writing that are not explicitly put forward in the sentences.



                      These connections may be between the backstories of the characters, or they may be between actions in one part of a story and another, or many other possibilities. "Depth" is where paying attention to the story gives the reader information about and a better understanding of the story.



                      Managing "depth" can be a difficult adjustment to get right. At one extreme you can demand perfect attention to and deep analysis of every detail for a story to make sense. At the other extreme, things just happen; every sentence stands on its own.



                      All right, examples:



                      John discusses having a dream with his teenage girlfriend about being attacked by a spider. Three hundred pages later, the ex-girlfriend is the CEO of a multi-planetary munitions contractor about to attack John's homeworld. John must choose the manner of defense, either accurate harpoon missiles or reliable nets. The ex outfits her fleet with 100% defense against harpoons because she knows he will avoid the nets because the icon next to the "fire nets" button looks like a web. She wins.



                      Or...



                      John had a girlfriend. Lots of stuff happens. Ex-girlfriend runs huge, evil company that attacks John's world. John chooses to defend with the weapon she is 100% ready to counter. Oh well.



                      Ok, the example is maybe too simple. But I think you would agree that the first example has more depth.



                      The real key is: How do you feel about it? If the story feels flat, add more depth. If you have to constantly check your notes to remind yourself why a character acted as they did, maybe the connections are non-intuitive, unbelievable, or excessively convoluted.



                      When you think it is about right, have someone else read it, and listen carefully to the substance of their feedback.






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                      • Thanks for your feedback and advice! I don't think my characters are flat- I think I might need to add a subplot, that's my conclusion anyways. Am I allowed to copy and paste the comments from my beta readers on here?

                        – Dawn Kelli
                        3 hours ago















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                      "Depth" is a word that could mean many things. In common among many of the ways I could apply the word "depth" to writing is a sense that there are connections within the writing that are not explicitly put forward in the sentences.



                      These connections may be between the backstories of the characters, or they may be between actions in one part of a story and another, or many other possibilities. "Depth" is where paying attention to the story gives the reader information about and a better understanding of the story.



                      Managing "depth" can be a difficult adjustment to get right. At one extreme you can demand perfect attention to and deep analysis of every detail for a story to make sense. At the other extreme, things just happen; every sentence stands on its own.



                      All right, examples:



                      John discusses having a dream with his teenage girlfriend about being attacked by a spider. Three hundred pages later, the ex-girlfriend is the CEO of a multi-planetary munitions contractor about to attack John's homeworld. John must choose the manner of defense, either accurate harpoon missiles or reliable nets. The ex outfits her fleet with 100% defense against harpoons because she knows he will avoid the nets because the icon next to the "fire nets" button looks like a web. She wins.



                      Or...



                      John had a girlfriend. Lots of stuff happens. Ex-girlfriend runs huge, evil company that attacks John's world. John chooses to defend with the weapon she is 100% ready to counter. Oh well.



                      Ok, the example is maybe too simple. But I think you would agree that the first example has more depth.



                      The real key is: How do you feel about it? If the story feels flat, add more depth. If you have to constantly check your notes to remind yourself why a character acted as they did, maybe the connections are non-intuitive, unbelievable, or excessively convoluted.



                      When you think it is about right, have someone else read it, and listen carefully to the substance of their feedback.






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                      • Thanks for your feedback and advice! I don't think my characters are flat- I think I might need to add a subplot, that's my conclusion anyways. Am I allowed to copy and paste the comments from my beta readers on here?

                        – Dawn Kelli
                        3 hours ago













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                      "Depth" is a word that could mean many things. In common among many of the ways I could apply the word "depth" to writing is a sense that there are connections within the writing that are not explicitly put forward in the sentences.



                      These connections may be between the backstories of the characters, or they may be between actions in one part of a story and another, or many other possibilities. "Depth" is where paying attention to the story gives the reader information about and a better understanding of the story.



                      Managing "depth" can be a difficult adjustment to get right. At one extreme you can demand perfect attention to and deep analysis of every detail for a story to make sense. At the other extreme, things just happen; every sentence stands on its own.



                      All right, examples:



                      John discusses having a dream with his teenage girlfriend about being attacked by a spider. Three hundred pages later, the ex-girlfriend is the CEO of a multi-planetary munitions contractor about to attack John's homeworld. John must choose the manner of defense, either accurate harpoon missiles or reliable nets. The ex outfits her fleet with 100% defense against harpoons because she knows he will avoid the nets because the icon next to the "fire nets" button looks like a web. She wins.



                      Or...



                      John had a girlfriend. Lots of stuff happens. Ex-girlfriend runs huge, evil company that attacks John's world. John chooses to defend with the weapon she is 100% ready to counter. Oh well.



                      Ok, the example is maybe too simple. But I think you would agree that the first example has more depth.



                      The real key is: How do you feel about it? If the story feels flat, add more depth. If you have to constantly check your notes to remind yourself why a character acted as they did, maybe the connections are non-intuitive, unbelievable, or excessively convoluted.



                      When you think it is about right, have someone else read it, and listen carefully to the substance of their feedback.






                      share|improve this answer













                      "Depth" is a word that could mean many things. In common among many of the ways I could apply the word "depth" to writing is a sense that there are connections within the writing that are not explicitly put forward in the sentences.



                      These connections may be between the backstories of the characters, or they may be between actions in one part of a story and another, or many other possibilities. "Depth" is where paying attention to the story gives the reader information about and a better understanding of the story.



                      Managing "depth" can be a difficult adjustment to get right. At one extreme you can demand perfect attention to and deep analysis of every detail for a story to make sense. At the other extreme, things just happen; every sentence stands on its own.



                      All right, examples:



                      John discusses having a dream with his teenage girlfriend about being attacked by a spider. Three hundred pages later, the ex-girlfriend is the CEO of a multi-planetary munitions contractor about to attack John's homeworld. John must choose the manner of defense, either accurate harpoon missiles or reliable nets. The ex outfits her fleet with 100% defense against harpoons because she knows he will avoid the nets because the icon next to the "fire nets" button looks like a web. She wins.



                      Or...



                      John had a girlfriend. Lots of stuff happens. Ex-girlfriend runs huge, evil company that attacks John's world. John chooses to defend with the weapon she is 100% ready to counter. Oh well.



                      Ok, the example is maybe too simple. But I think you would agree that the first example has more depth.



                      The real key is: How do you feel about it? If the story feels flat, add more depth. If you have to constantly check your notes to remind yourself why a character acted as they did, maybe the connections are non-intuitive, unbelievable, or excessively convoluted.



                      When you think it is about right, have someone else read it, and listen carefully to the substance of their feedback.







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                      answered 7 hours ago









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                      • Thanks for your feedback and advice! I don't think my characters are flat- I think I might need to add a subplot, that's my conclusion anyways. Am I allowed to copy and paste the comments from my beta readers on here?

                        – Dawn Kelli
                        3 hours ago

















                      • Thanks for your feedback and advice! I don't think my characters are flat- I think I might need to add a subplot, that's my conclusion anyways. Am I allowed to copy and paste the comments from my beta readers on here?

                        – Dawn Kelli
                        3 hours ago
















                      Thanks for your feedback and advice! I don't think my characters are flat- I think I might need to add a subplot, that's my conclusion anyways. Am I allowed to copy and paste the comments from my beta readers on here?

                      – Dawn Kelli
                      3 hours ago





                      Thanks for your feedback and advice! I don't think my characters are flat- I think I might need to add a subplot, that's my conclusion anyways. Am I allowed to copy and paste the comments from my beta readers on here?

                      – Dawn Kelli
                      3 hours ago











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                      A good way to ask if your work has meaning is to ask this simple question:



                      What is this story about?



                      With this in mind, a shallow story pops out like a sore thumb; the extent their answer can go to is 'It's about good people who are kind defeating bad people who are selfish' would be a good example. Or to use an actual example, say, Twilight:



                      'It's about a wallflower girl getting romanced by a hot mormon demigod vampire'.



                      This alone shows there's little going on beneath the surface. On the contrary, my most recent unpublished novel was actually overwrought, meaning it was equally bad, but unlike Twilight, also unmarketable. When asking the same of 'The Tale of Amerei Gemcutter', the answer looks something like this:



                      'It's about a girl coming of age, escaping a neglectful family, learning a skill, then settling on a new family while understanding the balance between accepting her desires while doing what's right, while also having a man learning to balance reason with assertiveness, getting over his abusive family and past, and accepting his worthiness to become a parent.'



                      This is way too much for one story, and the publishers were right to reject me as overly ambitious and rambling. Contrast with something like Terry Pratchett's Mort, which is:



                      'It's about a teenage boy getting an insight into the nature of death, fate, and duty as he gets an apprenticeship with the embodiment of Death'



                      Or perhaps my latest novel-in the works:



                      'It's about a woman who was raised in a cult getting exposed to ideas beyond her paradigm, and how she matures to cope with this.'



                      The answer to this simple question says a lot about the story's depth and quality.






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                      • Edward was a Mormon?

                        – DPT
                        7 hours ago






                      • 2





                        @DPT The closest thing to a subtle theme Twilight has is the weird mormon vibe (a side-effect of the writer being mormon). Jacob is native american and the 'wrong' choice, representing the temptation of mixed-race pairings, while Edward is a spitting image of Joseph Smith's self-description (white and delightsome, golden-red hair, warm eyes, etc). If you read with mormon ethics in mind, Twilight comes off as a good ol' Mormon propaganda. Even extends to Bella's mannerisms (holy crow instead of actual curses, treating drinking cola as a serious vice, etc)

                        – Matthew Dave
                        7 hours ago






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                        "What is this story about" can be a very deceptive question. Hemingway's The Sun Also Rises can be described as being about a bunch of friends going to see the bullfights in Pamplona. Not much depth in that description, is there? Or The Old Man and the Sea - it's about an old man trying to catch a fish. The depth in those novels is not in what else is happening - there's nothing else, per se; but in what is happening under the surface of this description. It's easy to miss if you just look at a one-sentence summary.

                        – Galastel
                        7 hours ago
















                      1














                      A good way to ask if your work has meaning is to ask this simple question:



                      What is this story about?



                      With this in mind, a shallow story pops out like a sore thumb; the extent their answer can go to is 'It's about good people who are kind defeating bad people who are selfish' would be a good example. Or to use an actual example, say, Twilight:



                      'It's about a wallflower girl getting romanced by a hot mormon demigod vampire'.



                      This alone shows there's little going on beneath the surface. On the contrary, my most recent unpublished novel was actually overwrought, meaning it was equally bad, but unlike Twilight, also unmarketable. When asking the same of 'The Tale of Amerei Gemcutter', the answer looks something like this:



                      'It's about a girl coming of age, escaping a neglectful family, learning a skill, then settling on a new family while understanding the balance between accepting her desires while doing what's right, while also having a man learning to balance reason with assertiveness, getting over his abusive family and past, and accepting his worthiness to become a parent.'



                      This is way too much for one story, and the publishers were right to reject me as overly ambitious and rambling. Contrast with something like Terry Pratchett's Mort, which is:



                      'It's about a teenage boy getting an insight into the nature of death, fate, and duty as he gets an apprenticeship with the embodiment of Death'



                      Or perhaps my latest novel-in the works:



                      'It's about a woman who was raised in a cult getting exposed to ideas beyond her paradigm, and how she matures to cope with this.'



                      The answer to this simple question says a lot about the story's depth and quality.






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                      • Edward was a Mormon?

                        – DPT
                        7 hours ago






                      • 2





                        @DPT The closest thing to a subtle theme Twilight has is the weird mormon vibe (a side-effect of the writer being mormon). Jacob is native american and the 'wrong' choice, representing the temptation of mixed-race pairings, while Edward is a spitting image of Joseph Smith's self-description (white and delightsome, golden-red hair, warm eyes, etc). If you read with mormon ethics in mind, Twilight comes off as a good ol' Mormon propaganda. Even extends to Bella's mannerisms (holy crow instead of actual curses, treating drinking cola as a serious vice, etc)

                        – Matthew Dave
                        7 hours ago






                      • 1





                        "What is this story about" can be a very deceptive question. Hemingway's The Sun Also Rises can be described as being about a bunch of friends going to see the bullfights in Pamplona. Not much depth in that description, is there? Or The Old Man and the Sea - it's about an old man trying to catch a fish. The depth in those novels is not in what else is happening - there's nothing else, per se; but in what is happening under the surface of this description. It's easy to miss if you just look at a one-sentence summary.

                        – Galastel
                        7 hours ago














                      1












                      1








                      1







                      A good way to ask if your work has meaning is to ask this simple question:



                      What is this story about?



                      With this in mind, a shallow story pops out like a sore thumb; the extent their answer can go to is 'It's about good people who are kind defeating bad people who are selfish' would be a good example. Or to use an actual example, say, Twilight:



                      'It's about a wallflower girl getting romanced by a hot mormon demigod vampire'.



                      This alone shows there's little going on beneath the surface. On the contrary, my most recent unpublished novel was actually overwrought, meaning it was equally bad, but unlike Twilight, also unmarketable. When asking the same of 'The Tale of Amerei Gemcutter', the answer looks something like this:



                      'It's about a girl coming of age, escaping a neglectful family, learning a skill, then settling on a new family while understanding the balance between accepting her desires while doing what's right, while also having a man learning to balance reason with assertiveness, getting over his abusive family and past, and accepting his worthiness to become a parent.'



                      This is way too much for one story, and the publishers were right to reject me as overly ambitious and rambling. Contrast with something like Terry Pratchett's Mort, which is:



                      'It's about a teenage boy getting an insight into the nature of death, fate, and duty as he gets an apprenticeship with the embodiment of Death'



                      Or perhaps my latest novel-in the works:



                      'It's about a woman who was raised in a cult getting exposed to ideas beyond her paradigm, and how she matures to cope with this.'



                      The answer to this simple question says a lot about the story's depth and quality.






                      share|improve this answer













                      A good way to ask if your work has meaning is to ask this simple question:



                      What is this story about?



                      With this in mind, a shallow story pops out like a sore thumb; the extent their answer can go to is 'It's about good people who are kind defeating bad people who are selfish' would be a good example. Or to use an actual example, say, Twilight:



                      'It's about a wallflower girl getting romanced by a hot mormon demigod vampire'.



                      This alone shows there's little going on beneath the surface. On the contrary, my most recent unpublished novel was actually overwrought, meaning it was equally bad, but unlike Twilight, also unmarketable. When asking the same of 'The Tale of Amerei Gemcutter', the answer looks something like this:



                      'It's about a girl coming of age, escaping a neglectful family, learning a skill, then settling on a new family while understanding the balance between accepting her desires while doing what's right, while also having a man learning to balance reason with assertiveness, getting over his abusive family and past, and accepting his worthiness to become a parent.'



                      This is way too much for one story, and the publishers were right to reject me as overly ambitious and rambling. Contrast with something like Terry Pratchett's Mort, which is:



                      'It's about a teenage boy getting an insight into the nature of death, fate, and duty as he gets an apprenticeship with the embodiment of Death'



                      Or perhaps my latest novel-in the works:



                      'It's about a woman who was raised in a cult getting exposed to ideas beyond her paradigm, and how she matures to cope with this.'



                      The answer to this simple question says a lot about the story's depth and quality.







                      share|improve this answer












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                      Matthew DaveMatthew Dave

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                      • Edward was a Mormon?

                        – DPT
                        7 hours ago






                      • 2





                        @DPT The closest thing to a subtle theme Twilight has is the weird mormon vibe (a side-effect of the writer being mormon). Jacob is native american and the 'wrong' choice, representing the temptation of mixed-race pairings, while Edward is a spitting image of Joseph Smith's self-description (white and delightsome, golden-red hair, warm eyes, etc). If you read with mormon ethics in mind, Twilight comes off as a good ol' Mormon propaganda. Even extends to Bella's mannerisms (holy crow instead of actual curses, treating drinking cola as a serious vice, etc)

                        – Matthew Dave
                        7 hours ago






                      • 1





                        "What is this story about" can be a very deceptive question. Hemingway's The Sun Also Rises can be described as being about a bunch of friends going to see the bullfights in Pamplona. Not much depth in that description, is there? Or The Old Man and the Sea - it's about an old man trying to catch a fish. The depth in those novels is not in what else is happening - there's nothing else, per se; but in what is happening under the surface of this description. It's easy to miss if you just look at a one-sentence summary.

                        – Galastel
                        7 hours ago


















                      • Edward was a Mormon?

                        – DPT
                        7 hours ago






                      • 2





                        @DPT The closest thing to a subtle theme Twilight has is the weird mormon vibe (a side-effect of the writer being mormon). Jacob is native american and the 'wrong' choice, representing the temptation of mixed-race pairings, while Edward is a spitting image of Joseph Smith's self-description (white and delightsome, golden-red hair, warm eyes, etc). If you read with mormon ethics in mind, Twilight comes off as a good ol' Mormon propaganda. Even extends to Bella's mannerisms (holy crow instead of actual curses, treating drinking cola as a serious vice, etc)

                        – Matthew Dave
                        7 hours ago






                      • 1





                        "What is this story about" can be a very deceptive question. Hemingway's The Sun Also Rises can be described as being about a bunch of friends going to see the bullfights in Pamplona. Not much depth in that description, is there? Or The Old Man and the Sea - it's about an old man trying to catch a fish. The depth in those novels is not in what else is happening - there's nothing else, per se; but in what is happening under the surface of this description. It's easy to miss if you just look at a one-sentence summary.

                        – Galastel
                        7 hours ago

















                      Edward was a Mormon?

                      – DPT
                      7 hours ago





                      Edward was a Mormon?

                      – DPT
                      7 hours ago




                      2




                      2





                      @DPT The closest thing to a subtle theme Twilight has is the weird mormon vibe (a side-effect of the writer being mormon). Jacob is native american and the 'wrong' choice, representing the temptation of mixed-race pairings, while Edward is a spitting image of Joseph Smith's self-description (white and delightsome, golden-red hair, warm eyes, etc). If you read with mormon ethics in mind, Twilight comes off as a good ol' Mormon propaganda. Even extends to Bella's mannerisms (holy crow instead of actual curses, treating drinking cola as a serious vice, etc)

                      – Matthew Dave
                      7 hours ago





                      @DPT The closest thing to a subtle theme Twilight has is the weird mormon vibe (a side-effect of the writer being mormon). Jacob is native american and the 'wrong' choice, representing the temptation of mixed-race pairings, while Edward is a spitting image of Joseph Smith's self-description (white and delightsome, golden-red hair, warm eyes, etc). If you read with mormon ethics in mind, Twilight comes off as a good ol' Mormon propaganda. Even extends to Bella's mannerisms (holy crow instead of actual curses, treating drinking cola as a serious vice, etc)

                      – Matthew Dave
                      7 hours ago




                      1




                      1





                      "What is this story about" can be a very deceptive question. Hemingway's The Sun Also Rises can be described as being about a bunch of friends going to see the bullfights in Pamplona. Not much depth in that description, is there? Or The Old Man and the Sea - it's about an old man trying to catch a fish. The depth in those novels is not in what else is happening - there's nothing else, per se; but in what is happening under the surface of this description. It's easy to miss if you just look at a one-sentence summary.

                      – Galastel
                      7 hours ago






                      "What is this story about" can be a very deceptive question. Hemingway's The Sun Also Rises can be described as being about a bunch of friends going to see the bullfights in Pamplona. Not much depth in that description, is there? Or The Old Man and the Sea - it's about an old man trying to catch a fish. The depth in those novels is not in what else is happening - there's nothing else, per se; but in what is happening under the surface of this description. It's easy to miss if you just look at a one-sentence summary.

                      – Galastel
                      7 hours ago












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                      +1 Galastel; I would say one way to approach an answer to her question, "What is the meaning of your story", is to ask yourself What do my characters learn?



                      Deep stories, at least by my definition, have characters learning something about the world (our real world, not their fantasy world), how it works, what is important in life, what is not that important.



                      I certainly don't want to slap readers in the face with life lessons; but my characters always learn something I personally think is important about life.



                      For me, the definition of "shallow" is characters that prevail but haven't changed by becoming any better. That might be a fun read, an adventure with imagination and clever plot twists, and I'm willing to have a shallow good time. But those stories are not deep. I'm not going to read them a second time. I don't fall in love with the characters, or feel like they are real people. I don't feel compelled to keep the book, it is something I'll donate to a school.






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                        +1 Galastel; I would say one way to approach an answer to her question, "What is the meaning of your story", is to ask yourself What do my characters learn?



                        Deep stories, at least by my definition, have characters learning something about the world (our real world, not their fantasy world), how it works, what is important in life, what is not that important.



                        I certainly don't want to slap readers in the face with life lessons; but my characters always learn something I personally think is important about life.



                        For me, the definition of "shallow" is characters that prevail but haven't changed by becoming any better. That might be a fun read, an adventure with imagination and clever plot twists, and I'm willing to have a shallow good time. But those stories are not deep. I'm not going to read them a second time. I don't fall in love with the characters, or feel like they are real people. I don't feel compelled to keep the book, it is something I'll donate to a school.






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                          +1 Galastel; I would say one way to approach an answer to her question, "What is the meaning of your story", is to ask yourself What do my characters learn?



                          Deep stories, at least by my definition, have characters learning something about the world (our real world, not their fantasy world), how it works, what is important in life, what is not that important.



                          I certainly don't want to slap readers in the face with life lessons; but my characters always learn something I personally think is important about life.



                          For me, the definition of "shallow" is characters that prevail but haven't changed by becoming any better. That might be a fun read, an adventure with imagination and clever plot twists, and I'm willing to have a shallow good time. But those stories are not deep. I'm not going to read them a second time. I don't fall in love with the characters, or feel like they are real people. I don't feel compelled to keep the book, it is something I'll donate to a school.






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                          +1 Galastel; I would say one way to approach an answer to her question, "What is the meaning of your story", is to ask yourself What do my characters learn?



                          Deep stories, at least by my definition, have characters learning something about the world (our real world, not their fantasy world), how it works, what is important in life, what is not that important.



                          I certainly don't want to slap readers in the face with life lessons; but my characters always learn something I personally think is important about life.



                          For me, the definition of "shallow" is characters that prevail but haven't changed by becoming any better. That might be a fun read, an adventure with imagination and clever plot twists, and I'm willing to have a shallow good time. But those stories are not deep. I'm not going to read them a second time. I don't fall in love with the characters, or feel like they are real people. I don't feel compelled to keep the book, it is something I'll donate to a school.







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